I had been seeing her, always at the same place, muttering to the same or similar ducks, for weeks before I ventured to speak to her. If I had not had crackers in my pocket I would never have begun our little commerce with an offer of food, but as I stretched my hand across the impossible gulf between us there they were, each a simple orange square, pierced by fork points, twinned with another by a swipe of peanut glue, six such pairs arranged in three ranks of two files each, edge to edge, back to indistinguishable lightly salted back, girdled in cellophane. They had been meant for the dogs, who watched in alarm.
Think I can’t get crackers? she asked me. Thinks I can’t get crackers! Not bothering to unwrap them then, I dispensed the packet to the dogs, who tumbled over one another and let the crackers lie.
Her crew and she have burglarized my house repeatedly since, and so thoroughly I no longer lock it for fear they’ll shatter the rest of the windows to thank me. She leads them in, as she first led them to my door, and if asked why, I suspect her explanation would involve the crackers.
We curl together now, at night, the dogs and I, sometimes in bed, more often at the foot, beneath the little overhang, and huddle head to toe or paw to head or hand and listen for the door. I’ve moved their bowls upstairs. They’re hungry mostly, rarely vicious, she and those she brings. Whatever made me think I could offer a little, without offering all, I regret now thinking, but I’m happy when everyone gets a little something, and that the dogs and I have a bed and a home and friends who call.
Copyright ©1997-2006 David Hodges
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November 3, 2006 at 8:14 am
litlove
Your writing reminds me more and more of Roald Dahl, with his fascination for twisted scenarios and the dark underside of the soul. Have you read his Tales of the Unexpected?
I try not to read too much Dahl for fear of overinfluence, but yes, I do remember the Tales, and thank you for the apt comparison. I keep looking for the bright underside, litlove, and share what I find. Maybe dark is just too easy.
–David
November 3, 2006 at 1:52 pm
ambergeek
What a neat blog concept–I’m enjoying the stories. I’ll add Very Short Novels to my links list.
Thank you, ambergeek. Glad to have you as a reader. I keep finding new reasons to visit your site, too.
–David
November 3, 2006 at 4:39 pm
caveblogem
I just finished reading Another Bullshit Day in Suck City, Nicholas Flynn’s memoir about his alcoholic father, who abandoned his family while Nick was still a toddler. Nick meets up with him later on, working for a huge homeless shelter in Boston called the Pine Street Inn. Such dark stuff and now some of the images from that combine with those from your story and also the children’s book Make Way for Ducklings, set in Boston as well. That means I liked it. Keep ’em coming, David.
That’s a rich stew you’ve got going there, Cave. Shouldn’t you be writing your nanowrimo?
–David
November 4, 2006 at 6:55 pm
M. Shahin
This was very nice…you took us from crackers to something more. Wow! It is amazing how this story transitions so well, and the reader is guided along without even knowing it is going to end up like it does. Beautiful!
Caught you off-guard, did I, mshahin? Thanks for the compliment.
–David
November 5, 2006 at 10:07 pm
red dirt girl
mmmmm……not dark or morose…….more gritty and urban. where i come from, we never locked the door……..but then again strangers rarely entered…….why should they when we were all strangers ourselves? another excellent piece, D.
red dirt girl
November 6, 2006 at 9:05 pm
Jason
Interesting writing, i enjoyed rereading it a couple times just to make sure i got the idea(s) properly (and i hope i did) HAHA. Your story provoked a number of ideas in me, the disadvantaged, pride, aid, vandalism, fear, among others, but i don’t think all of them were intentioned. Your story gave me a lot of ideas to spin off, thanks for the interesting story. I am curious to your main purpose or point of the story. Which line of discussion or flow of ideas from the reader were you aiming for? 🙂 Based on the title i would guess that the characters weren’t all the much different.
Jason, I can see we’re going to get along fine. I love your reading of the title and I can’t tell you how very grateful I am for your multiple readings! As for which “line of discussion” to follow, I’m greedy. I want credit for all of them. I hope that’s fair. After all, I only need your attention for 299 words, not 299 pages. Do whatever you want with the extra time!
–David
November 7, 2006 at 1:55 pm
red dirt girl
mmmm I believe I left a comment yesterday……but it could have fallen through the cracks – something that I seem to becoming quite famous for…! The Roald Dahl reference……yes I believe you have a touch of his twistings, but for me this was more urban and gritty……….I liked how the character felt disenfranchised in the end.
-red dirt girl
I found your comments in my spam filter and fished them out. Thank you for being so attentive.
–David
November 28, 2006 at 2:04 pm
Annelisa
Really enjoyed your story, David
I’m impressed how you managed to keep within the 299 words (I haven’t actually counted, right enough! 🙂 ), and still managed to bring the whole to life – that’s a great talent you have there!
Thank you, Annelisa. I count them very carefully, but draw the line at independent certification. If you cut-and-paste them into Word, though, you can Word Count them with a click. I know that’s not your point, and thank you again for your attentive and generous readership.
–David
December 1, 2006 at 7:13 am
Annelisa
You mean, there’s not exactly 299 words in each one?!! Oh, I’m heartbroken!
Don’t despair. I count them very carefully. 299 words each.
–David
Seriously, though, I was thinking about your short novels, and it occurred to me that it is much like writing poetry – you have to contain the whole idea within very limited words… It’s not always easy, as you often have to prune away many other ideas to keep it concise…
I maintain that’s a genius quality you have! 🙂
You are wonderful to say so, Annelisa. Another attentive reader compared the process to songwriting, which also has to do much with little. Either way, I’m grateful I can do at least this.
–David
December 2, 2006 at 12:12 am
briseis
I think that Homer and Dante would have something to say about poetry having to be written in “very limited words”– their pens knew no bounds.
I am very fond of this piece, by the way.
Wordy classics! I should shrink them some day. I am very happy to hear from you, by the way.
–David