When the great wars began, hundreds of clans held sway over portions of the enormous land, each with its own gods and culture, totems, legends, marriage laws and methods of war. For hundreds of years the battles raged until the forty most ruthless clans had stained the land with the blood of the less ruthless. Their gods also perished, along with countless warriors slain and civilians starved and trampled. Belief systems were trod into the dust, ground to powder like small bones underfoot. Gods who had commanded awe for centuries were forgotten and ceased to exist. As part of the living spirit of a people, they expired with the last breaths of the last believers. As fragments of history, they perished with the burning of the holy parchments, the toppling of the holy stones. We only think they might once have existed. And with the expansion of the conquering clans, the influence of the new gods grew, always in fulfillment of prophesy. Thus were the vengeful gods of the most rapacious warriors adopted throughout the land. Forty clans, even belligerent clans as arrogant as these, might have lived in suspended hostility in such a vast world, but forty gods—fickle, indifferent, vindictive—could not. Most had to die, but it was not always necessary to eliminate the believers, who commonly adopted the conquering gods as a cost of living. Fresh victories confirmed the faith of the true believers in the power of their gods to deliver them from danger. Each battle they survived convinced them, as they took up arms against another god, that they could not die. Now the pretenders lie in waste. Let us scatter with the winds and tell the good news of the one true god to lands about which madmen and mystics have dreamt.
Copyright © December 19, 2006 David Hodges
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December 20, 2006 at 1:16 am
mathiezhil
Hi David,
A nice one. Very impressive. The subject reminds of a Borges and the brevity reminds me of Donald Barthelme. A very nice one. The wordplay at places was quite amazing—”less ruthless” was my favourite.
Thank you, mathiezhil! And bravo to you for discerning two of my primary influences. As for “less ruthless,” I did briefly consider “with more ruth.”
–David
December 20, 2006 at 12:44 pm
litlove
I like you in mythic battle mode. Particularly fond of the line about belief systems being ground into the dust like small bones. It’s a delightful paradox, but you can do cosmic very well indeed in 299 words!
Thank you, litlove. Mythic and cosmic are refuges for those without much particular knowledge of actual history.
–David
December 21, 2006 at 12:09 am
stjarna67
I like this one a lot, especially the last line.
Gods are treated like coins in the empire. They’re traded, spent, collected, and ultimately exchanged when the next mortal ruling empire decides to change the economy. The value fluctuates and the perceived market value raises with spiritual hope or crashes with moral despair.
I’ll have to think about a NAFTA reference, tho’.
Good stuff!
-sj
You work on that part, stjarna. I’ve done all I can here.
–David
December 21, 2006 at 12:33 am
qazse
“who commonly adopted the conquering gods as a cost of living.” I love this line and the one litove refers to.
“Mythic and cosmic are refuges for those without much particular knowledge of actual history.” And this is a hoot.
best
Thank you qazse. You are the first to quote my comments back to me. I love it!
–David
January 18, 2007 at 1:31 pm
Sean Wilson
Hi David,
I’m glad you dropped by my blog this morning to comment, else I might never have found my way here. Loved this one. Love your site as well.
Consider your site added to my blogroll, as well as my personal Favorites shrine.
I think I’ll write it up in my next installment of Three Great Sites For Writers.
My only question at the moment, is this: have you ever tried your hand at the NANOWRIMO (National Novel Writing Month) competition? If so, was it distressing to someone who’s taken condensing fiction to a whole new level?
Thanks, Sean. I feel lucky, too, to have found your site by way of Tag Surfer. Your editorial attitude is irresistible. Expect to see more footprints from me. As for NANOWRIMO, it would kill me, unless they gave me a special dispensation on the word count.
–David