They were torches to our matchsticks. They ate our city’s oxygen and everything else on the menu. In the early days of the occupation, we caught rare glimpses of them at the opera, the better cafes, at the racetrack calculating odds. The stitching of their uniforms made shoulders broad and tapered waists; the sharp black bills of their peaked caps reflected lustre. I speak for the entire city. We know now the world squints back at the startling color of their confident eyes and calls it all arrogance, worse, and we don’t deny it, but they spoke our language carefully, apologetically if not well. You’ll say we were charmed. As more arrived in caravans or after long marches through the provinces, we saw them getting out of cabs to help children down from streetcars. Elsewhere our terrorists smudged the skies with dynamite, derailing trains and unbridging rivers, to the broadcasts of resisters in exile, but those of us who claimed these roofs and stones had a different sort of politics, and bunkered down in what was essential to us all. At brothels they were favored for their generosity and scrupulous demeanor. For the ladies they insisted on and for themselves submitted to intimate examinations. Ask a madame still alive and she’ll remember. We knew them already as neighbors and tourists. We understood, too, that these few thousand we hosted were the fittest. But what did it matter to us? We had our enemy here. Absence from home sharpened their enthusiasm for our bread and coffee and magnificent women, our singers and celebrated sights. Revisionists blame us for bringing out our best while battles raged and we don’t dispute anything that happened. We only want to say it isn’t easy to live and we too defeated them in our manner.
Copyright ©January 30, 2007 David Hodges
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January 30, 2007 at 11:27 am
The Centurion
Ah, the joys of concise prose … you’re a man after my own heart.
I think, by your favorite formula, I’ve wasted 199?
–David
January 31, 2007 at 4:39 pm
litlove
I like this because the strangeness of transition, the contrast between the citizens and their exotic oppressors/guardians (because after all the two are always dangerously close), and the sense that something will happen outside of the narrative gives you lots of lovely compass points to send your narrative shooting down. I like it when you load an uncertain situation with lots of enigmatic implications.
Thank you, litlove. It’s a delicate balance, the putting in and leaving out. I try to do my share and a little bit more, and leave you room to make the story your own.
–David
February 2, 2007 at 10:14 am
Lori
“putting in and leaving out” — definitely a balancing act. I noticed this line — “Elsewhere our terrorists smudged the skies with dynamite, derailing trains and unbridging rivers” — as being particularly succinct.
Thanks, Lori. There’s a lot in that “elsewhere.”
–David
February 6, 2007 at 12:02 am
David Schleicher
What was this about? Like Lori above…I love that one line…and as you say, there is a lot in that “elsewhere.” But sometimes I want a confirmation of what this is about. I imagined both a Nazi occupation of France, but also…more presently, the Muslim presence in France…but the details you provide don’t seem to recommend either. This is at once vague and nicely detailed. I find this to be your most frustrating work yet.
I appreciate the way you enrich my own reading experience and the thinking of all who read your sharp comments. Thanks again for making my stories better.
–David
February 6, 2007 at 4:11 pm
Sean Wilson
After I read this, I tried to read two more. I found myself distracted and kept coming back to stare at the first two lines.
“They were torches to our matchsticks. They ate our city’s oxygen and everything else on the menu.”
Those lines will be stuck in my mind for days to come. That has to be the best opening for fiction of any length that I have read in a long time.
Once again, you have given me reason to marvel at what you do—and reason to despair over my own writing.
🙂
I’m only half-pleased to hear that. But your praise I very much appreciate. Thank you, Sean.
–David