Dear B—
You can’t imagine how a woman of substance has changed this house and all your boys, me included. Billy brought her, thinking she was his, but they’ve each found reasons to love her, features of you, I think, that they vaguely remember. They’re grown men now, and they wouldn’t like to hear it, but they’ve fallen in love with their mother. You’d have liked her. Oh, B—. I should never have brought you to this frontier, nor ever have thought the pitiless sky would shelter you, nor mountains embrace you. A man in love is thoughtless. I see it now in the boys and understand better where I went wrong. My only defense is your eyes. There, I’ve made you laugh. When I first saw you in that chipped-cup café at the table alone, when you were still in school and I had my first job and prospects to take me away, and my bag of blueprints to build a future far from home, any confidence I needed then to approach you as a stranger I took from those very eyes that did me in. You laughed without mercy. And when I told you anyway that you had an expressive face, I meant is as a warning, that I could tell from your eyes you would follow me anywhere, despite my sense of direction. I should have let you be. Sheltered in a town full of friends and married to the local— something, whatever you wanted, you could have been anyone, instead of slowly failing here on acres of nothing, raising boys and livestock and being the colonel’s wife. I wish you were here to see her, B—. The boys will have a hard time keeping her from me. I see it in her eyes.
Copyright © March 13, 2007 David Hodges
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March 13, 2007 at 9:33 pm
grasshopper
“The Colonel’s Acres,” while clearly a different story, rings with the same clarity and voice that made “The Snow Comes Early” fluid and compelling. Kudos.
Gosh, grasshopper. I hope you’ll come by every time!
–David
March 13, 2007 at 10:22 pm
briseiscaptured
This is beautiful. I love it.
Thank you, Briseis. I hope readers will click through and read your story, too.
–David
March 14, 2007 at 1:31 pm
Wizzer
Where do you get your inspiration from each day David? Written with such feeling (as always) you could be the Colonel.
Thanks, Wizzer. Regarding inspiration I can’t say. I do know I never turn down an idea. Even bad or little ideas seem worthy of 299 words.
–David
March 14, 2007 at 4:03 pm
Anthony
I think it’s interesting the clarity a son can provide a father, when he sees himself.
I think you’re right, Anthony. Maybe you’ve seen yourself in your son.
–David
March 14, 2007 at 5:18 pm
litlove
I love the way past and present intertwine over the figures of two women and the desire of one man. Beautiful and moving.
Thank you, Litlove.
–David
March 15, 2007 at 11:23 am
Vi
I’ve been a silent reader of your stories, and this is particularly lovely. 🙂
Thank, you, Vi. I remember your own very visceral short fiction called What Once Was. Thank you for deciding to comment today.
–David
March 15, 2007 at 1:35 pm
silentsurfur
This is awesome David……. Hats off to you…….. from Suresh from India…
Thanks, Suresh! So glad you took the time to drop by and comment!
–David
March 16, 2007 at 7:01 am
Marel
Better than Lovestory and that made me cry.
Thanks, Marel.
–David
March 19, 2007 at 3:17 am
Polaris
Beautiful. The story speaks volumes for how deep the first relationship must have been, how painful the separation. Its such a nice way of communicating that the colonel’s anguish has, in some measure, been eased by the wonderful woman in his life.
Thank you, Polaris. You’re very generous to give the colonel another chance.
–David
March 19, 2007 at 8:02 am
verbivore
There is so much life (history AND personality) packed into these lines – and I just love how the compliment is also a warning. Lovely.
Thank you, verbivore. Someday it would be instructive to hear the various readings I sense behind so many comments on these stories. But, I should probably be careful what I wish for. So many warnings are hidden in compliments. Yours I will take a face value, though, and thank you for it unambiguously.
–David