We don’t do it for the fish. We come out when our wives have had enough of us, reliably once a month, sometimes more often if we poke the right buttons.
—They’re biting today,
—Yeah. Damn it.
—Don’t use bait, brother.
—That would be cheating.
Mist hovered low over smooth pond water, clear where we were, thicker toward the shore and the dark line of trees against the brightening sky.
—How’s my therapy going?
—You’ve had a revelation.
—I like a revelation!
—I hope so. Seems, for you, it’s all about Dad’s love.
—Something in particular?
—Its absence.
Something silver flashed below the surface and troubled the waters until we brought it out to thrash inside the boat.
—I thought we agreed you’d tell my therapist Dad loved me, but didn’t particularly like me.
—I told her. She didn’t buy it. Said you were insincere.
—I’m stunned. She said Dad’s love was absent?
—Relatively absent.
—Relative to what?
—His love for your older brother.
—That’s you.
—I know.
The fish flipped itself up and over the side of the boat, still hooked, and dragged the pole into the pond after.
—Then you wept.
—That usually means it’s true.
—Blubbered, actually.
We watched the rod and reel sink slowly through the water.
—But Dad took me fishing!
—Me, too.
—You hated fishing, though!
—He never picked up on that.
Pond water applauded over the rocks below the spillway.
—Tell me about my therapist.
—She’s quite fetching.
—You never said so.
—I think she likes you. Your story.
—What does she think of my older brother?
—He’s good to you; pays for your therapy.
A soft breeze swirled through the misty morning.
—I need my own health insurance.
—You need a job first.
—Couldn’t you hire me?
—You’re seeing a shrink.
Copyright © April 07, 2007 David Hodges
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April 7, 2007 at 3:43 pm
Vi
This is a new and interesting format for your story, and one I enjoyed very much.
Well, thank you, Vi. The only rule is 299 words. Glad you liked it.
–David
April 9, 2007 at 9:08 am
Vahsek
A nice read, indeed. What more shall I say?
keep up the good work
all the best
That’s more than enough, Vahsek! Thanks for the visit. Just came back from your ‘jack of some trades” blog. Things to love there: half-eaten books, beating up a cat in a closed room, “I blog to belittle myself.” My regards,
–David
April 9, 2007 at 12:41 pm
OmbudsBen
Good stuff!
—I need my own health insurance. —You need a job first. —Couldn’t you hire me? —You’re seeing a shrink.
That’s some catch, catcha-22!
Thanks, Ben. That makes me hear Alan Arkin as Yossarian in my head: “That’s some catch, that catch-22!”
–David
Here’s a link for the person who does not know the whole conversation:
http://www.pbs.org/newshour/bb/remember/july-dec99/heller_12-13.html
April 9, 2007 at 4:29 pm
jimdwalton
The dynamic of siblings often lead to life long jealous relationships of love. Your brother may love you and want you to do well but not too well and if you do, they may have to revert back to childhood to find you pain. No one knows whom dad loved more because most dads did not communicate about such emotional stuff. Tell me David, how far off am I?
Thanks, Jim. You know me better than to expect personal revelations here, and these stories are not my life. But I have five brothers, hence, five relationships with brothers, all of them close and supportive. About the rest, you and I can email. I would welcome it. Thank you as always for your deep readings and thoughtful comments.
–David
I never thought of any novel as personal, I was searching for a general message to society that could apply to many people, including myself. Good stuff.
Well, your reading certainly seems reasonable to me. Thanks again, Jim.
–David
April 9, 2007 at 4:57 pm
Annelisa
You know, I felt like crying at this… I got that the younger sibling (doesn’t specify brother, but I got the idea it was, because of the ‘fishing with dad’) could never live up to his father’s expectations, would never be ‘as good as’ his older brother… and for that, he lived a life of lowered expectations, of never quite achieving the love he was looking for.
This particularly hit home, because it was only a year or so ago that my older sister suddenly turned round and told me she hated me when we were younger, because I was always ‘dad’s favourite’… funny thing is, I only remember forever being told off and sworn at for doing everything wrong!! Why is it that, whatever we do, we always put ourselves down!!
Jeez, I think this one’s all I’m going to deal with this visit, David. You write very powerful short stories!! :-S
See you soon! And Happy Easter! (Belated, of course… 😀 )
Thank you so much, Annelisa. I ache for anyone who ever felt unloved and hope you and your sister have found peace in the present. I thought this one was a comedy, but that just shows you how oblivious I am to the impact stories can have on sensitive readers.
–David
April 10, 2007 at 11:27 am
mandarine
This is first class. You should do more very short plays.
Thank you, mandarine! That is perfectly beautifully put.
–David
April 10, 2007 at 7:03 pm
litlove
Oh I applaud mandarine’s comment. But I was also thinking of the tradition of the dialogue, that’s mutated over the years from Socrates to Colette’s conversations between cats and dogs. I congratulate you, David, on being one of the founders of the flash dialogue. It’s possibilities for implications, enigmas and swift, blinding revelations is perfectly suited to your style.
Wow, Litlove! There’s a pair of influences I’d never have thought to wind together! I love the way you tease apart the strands that go into my yarns.
–David
April 10, 2007 at 9:26 pm
timethief
The best thing about being an everyday blogger is having an opportunity to read stories like this. The worst thing is knowing if the power fails you’ll be left in the cold and dark, craving more.
Timethief, I don’t know what to say. Thank you doesn’t suffice. But, thank you.
–David
April 11, 2007 at 8:29 am
Wizzer
I’m confused by the “tell me about my therapist” thread. I saw a split personality in this story talking to him/herself – having created an alter ego at an early age.
David, I’m still amazed at how you can weave some much thought provoking stuff in so few words. Masterful.
Sorry, Wizzer. Didn’t mean to confuse you. The story of these two brothers is a little complex for so few words.
–David
April 11, 2007 at 1:48 pm
Marloes
The easy banter between siblings, and the hidden meaning behind it! Great read David!
~ sorry for not being around for a while, life sometimes sneaks up and bites one in the butt~
Thanks, Marloes. I do notice when you’re not around, but certainly understand. I am a most unreliable blog-guest myself.
–David
September 5, 2007 at 7:43 pm
Anna
david, you were right, this one was good too. just amazed how you come up with such stories. thanks for pointing out. anna 🙂
Thanks, Anna. I thought you might enjoy the stylistic similarity to Naked River.
–David