Either she was magnificent and the world makes sense in a deeply unfair but ordinary sort of way, or her looks, which strike everyone who sees her as a force of nature, are the reasonable norm and the rest of the world falls short. She was unequal in every way, a triumph of surface exceptionality. When fortune smiled and I caught her eye, I nullified democracy in my heart. I thought: I can move through ordinary rooms and play by the rules or I can step outside. It would have been possible to love a lesser girl, but I would have needed reasons. When happenstance brought her near me, I could briefly exist, even momentarily appear visible to her, working my laughable charm which at the time was to understand her, but not for long, and as I faded to nonentity, I wondered, could there be value to this sort of longing? When I convinced her to make love (by asking!), by challenging her to turn me down, it won’t surprise you to hear the sex was lousy. What man would tell her? We talked all night and disagreed about everything and I tried a new way to attain palpability. We debated. I considered her positions; adopted them as premises, as if she weren’t a premise in herself. It meant ignoring her eminence, which took effort, but I hadn’t given up the idea of living in her presence. By dawn the sun looked silly. We stood together naked at the window and thought about breakfast. When she brought me eggs and didn’t make me dress, when she didn’t make me ask about the toast, when she took the rest of the whole young day for granted, I knew what a terrible hurry she’d been in to be in love.
Copyright © April 10, 2007 David Hodges
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April 11, 2007 at 1:06 am
whitishrabbit
Delightful.
Thanks, rabbit!
–David
April 11, 2007 at 10:04 am
zeronero
Wow, real eye opener 🙂
Thanks, zeronero!
–David
April 11, 2007 at 10:58 am
Anthony
It’s amazing how we would try to change ourselves or the other person because they are so beautiful. Beauty truly is a powerful force.
Got that right, Antman!
–David
April 11, 2007 at 1:28 pm
JD
david, a lot of meaning, be careful what you wish for, you might get it, beauty is in the eye of the beholder, as you know for many of my friends drugs were their beauty, here is one, regarding the beauty of crack, one hit is too many but a million hits is not enough! nice work.
Wow, Jim. Again you surprise me. It’s a wonder you survived your friends. I’m glad I didn’t have to be as strong as you must have been to resist those ephemeral fixes. Thank you as always for your comments.
–David
April 11, 2007 at 3:36 pm
litlove
I think this is really intriguing though it’s hard to put my finger on what exactly intrigues so much. I think it’s the distinction you imply between the rules of conduct seemingly dictated by the surface, the image, and then the inevitable surprise of what lies hidden behind that surface, the dragon’s soft underbelly that is only revealed when all is lost. The rules of attraction are dictated by that shiny surface, but love is the miracle of recognition and mutual tenderness to what lies beneath.
Gosh, that’s pretty, Litlove. I’m not sure I know where the pivot point lies in this one, either. I think it might be just pure story, not something I usually do. My other theory is that it’s just the introduction to something longer.
–David
April 11, 2007 at 10:23 pm
timethief
{waving and throwing a kiss} *
Hello, there, timethief!!!
–David
April 11, 2007 at 10:25 pm
Jill Terry
What a terrible disappointment (the girl, not the story).
Maybe she’s not so unequal after all.
–David
April 12, 2007 at 12:50 pm
Wizzer
In the words of The Stranglers – “…better watch out for the skin deep”
Good advice, that. Thanks, Wizzer.
–David
April 20, 2007 at 9:13 pm
briseis
This is
beautiful.
Amazing, astounding.
I love it. . .and can say neither more nor less.
Thank you,
Briseis!
You know me:
I’m all about “no more, no less.”
–David
April 20, 2007 at 9:33 pm
briseis
No fair making fun of my line breaks.
You left me breathless with this one.
Sorry, Briseis. Couldn’t resist.
–David
April 21, 2007 at 4:21 pm
briseis
Cruel, cruel man.
April 30, 2007 at 5:18 pm
Lakshmi
“(by asking!), by challenging her to turn me down”– How so not manipulative David? Would one want anyone after all that planning? Hmmh….
I don’t know, Lakshmi. My only strategy is begging.
–David
May 4, 2007 at 7:19 pm
Crème de la Blog
I posted this on your pages at MyBlogLog, but thought you might prefer the notice here.
Count me a fan. I’ve reviewed Very Short Novels on my blog:
http://cremdelablog.blogspot.com/
Hey, thanks! Followed that link myself. I’ll cross-post your very kind review on my “Cross-Posted” page soon.
–David
September 11, 2010 at 8:15 am
ken
I Loved the story! (sometimes I feel like that girl)… (smiles)….
September 11, 2010 at 8:22 am
ken
… when I say that sometimes I feel like that girl… I mean… just wanting to be loved…. (more smiles)…
September 13, 2010 at 12:19 am
Janny
I don’t get it. I want to get it, but I don’t understand the last line. Maybe you just made that last part up to be the conundrum to her conundrum; it all seems about self worth and self perception. If I were that woman, I would have not cared about eggs, toast, clothes or the rest. But I would have said no to the affair and just eaten breakfast at Tiffany’s.
September 13, 2010 at 12:48 am
Janny
It seems like you wrote,”… I saw a prize that I wanted. I went after the prize. I got it. Now I don’t want it anymore.” Kind of a cheap shot, but perhaps that is the character of the voice. He didn’t want to want her after he got her, so he made excuses that she wanted love too much and she was too easy. I don’t think he thought much of himself, and kept that self-centered opinion going more than giving love.