They came to me when the first one didn’t work out. Ignoring procedure, they placed the baby on the baby scale themselves: cheeks like plums and blowing spit bubbles. A boy, I guessed, from all the blue.
—That’s the first thing.
—That he’s a boy?
—He wasn’t supposed to be.
—The odds are fifty-fifty, roughly.
—Not any more, they’re not.
Dad stood by with the empty baby carrier, looking a little sick to his stomach. I checked the scales and consulted my chart.
—He’s not overweight. Not quite underweight.
—Not quite. But just about.
—He seems placid, alert, responsive.
—You’re not with him all day.
I don’t know why it sounded like a threat. With her eyes on me, she pointed to the floor. Dad put down the carrier.
—I can keep him overnight, if you like.
—What good will that do?
—Try to get his weight up.
—It’s not just his weight.
She pushed the scale across the counter, baby in the pan, rocking and gurgling. Sheet metal scraped the countertop with a horrible screeching sound.
—We don’t get along.
—Well, sure, the first few months can be tough.
—We’re not compatible is what I’m saying.
I looked the baby over as if sizing him up for a gift box. I wondered what clothes I had at home that would fit him. I wondered what he ate.
—Are you looking for some kind of refund?
—So there is such a thing.
—Um. It’s rare. And there’s no money.
She knew when to keep her mouth shut. She was either still losing her belly or already showing. She waited.
—We have a special program.
—That sounds good.
I don’t think he remembers her. I can’t think of a reason to remind him, or any of his brothers and sisters.
Copyright © April 21, 2007 David Hodges
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April 22, 2007 at 2:15 pm
fox
I’m always amazed at just how different your topics are – the depth of character and the immediacy of the story is consistently incredible, but your ability to touch on practically any kind of relationship or circumstance just astounds me.
In a way, your writing reminds me of the beginning of each creative writing class in high school when we did mind flow exercises – our teacher put up a quote, played part of a song, gave us a first sentence, or showed us a picture and we wrote for however many minutes (I think it was about ten). Aside from getting us to the point where we would put words on the page, the journals full of these were resources for things to use in various states of groomed or disassembled in our writing assignments.
Because of the topic range reading through them was sort of like looking over your novels (though your novels have taken the time to do their hair and check their coat matches their shoes, where as the mind flows more had just tumbled out of bed and come downstairs for Corn Puffs), but even then my mind flows often linked or cross-referenced, had the same narrators, or continued one another (and the mental gymnastics to follow a prompt on a tiger in a jungle to a prompt on a delicate music box was what I thought was fun) so that they could touch on lots of things, but in one tone.
The ability to step into so many unique points of view and tell something complete in such a small number of words is truly remarkable. (And something I certainly never picked up, as you might note from the insane amount of rambling here.)
Thank you for another amazing and compelling tiny novel!
So, you liked it? Thanks, fox!
–David
April 22, 2007 at 5:35 pm
JaneDoughnut
Chilling.
Thanks, Jane!
–David
April 23, 2007 at 2:28 am
Wizzer
This will no doubt touch any parent & particularly anyone involved in an adoption – from either side or organising. You always manage to find the “trigger” points in these relationships as though you’ve been through them yourself. NB If you have you’ve had an extremely full life!!
Thanks, Wizzer! I have to say I’m just as glad they’re fiction.
–David
April 23, 2007 at 3:36 am
Gino
I also found this chilling. It’s a frightening tightrope you walk between fact and near fact…
Thanks, Gino. I understand that image. I do have to be careful where the next foot falls.
–David
April 25, 2007 at 3:03 am
Polaris
“She was either still losing her belly or already showing”. That line troubled me.
Me, too. Thanks, Polaris.
–David
April 25, 2007 at 6:50 am
lucylastic
This was brilliant!!!! And scary. I don’t always understand your novels – but always find them very thought provoking! How do you do it? I really envy you your talent.
Thank you, lucylastic. I’m glad you were provoked.
–David
May 5, 2007 at 6:06 pm
Crème de la Blog
I read this yesterday. It lingered on my mind. Came back today to reread.
Seriously good.
I left a comment on “Princess or Tiger” as well – but was so engrossed, forgot to fill my name in. So, that’s me – Anonymous.
Thanks, Creme. I did see your comment at Princess or Tiger. Now I know who to thank!
–David
May 8, 2007 at 12:23 am
verbivore
I love the mix of traditional and futuristic in this novel, David. And there is so much emotion here, and from each character. The anger and blunt shame in the mother, the queasy uncertainty of the father. Even the narrator gets to move from resigned to careful anger. I really enjoyed this one!
Thanks, verbivore! I’m having fun, too, with the dialogue model. As you say, it lends itself to multi-character story lines.
–David