In all our years together, she had never seen me without it. Even I wasn’t sure how I’d look once I’d shaved. Hands on the sink, I peered into the foggy mirror considering my face and saw her figure flash past. I’m thinking of shaving my mustache, I said. I’m thinking of going for groceries, she answered, as if she hadn’t heard me. That’s how it is with us: thrust and parry, rarely a palpable hit. I laughed and heard her start the car. I had time to reflect, make it a real decision. Things change, I thought, and we go on. I picked up the scissors. Bodies sag, I thought. Snip. Careers evolve; families focus or fade. Snip. Children are born, or not born. Parents are laid to rest. Snip, snip. We absorb the blows and cling to one another and grow or grow apart. I shaved the rest clean. I didn’t show her right away. Barefoot, shirtless, I hauled the groceries in a shaving cream mustache, as if I were still deciding. She laughed, and told me to get ready to go out. At her makeup mirror, I kissed her neck. I showed my face. She didn’t say a word, or blink, not a flicker. She smiled. The whole night out there was something unspoken between us. I cut my steak to shreds and let it sit. I slammed car doors. She talked of other things, irrelevant things, endless, maddening irrelevancies. I stopped the car and slammed the gearshift into park. That’s enough, I said. You can stop pretending you don’t notice. If you don’t like it, say so. She looked confused. She shrank toward the door. Notice what? she pleaded, You’re frightening me. With all my heart, I could not bring myself to say the word.
Copyright © June 20 David Hodges
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June 20, 2007 at 9:31 am
Somerset Bob
Having sported a full beard since my early twenties, I recently removed all but a goatee after some 30 years and then, spurred on by a desire to appear more youthful on the newly discovered dance floors of Bristol’s wilder clubs, I shaved even that away. I felt naked and exposed, but rejuvenated – though the female dancers seemed not to notice this new, boyish me gyrating amongst them, much to my disappointment.
It wasn’t long, however, before the irksome lack of a chin – the reason, I recalled, that I wore a beard in the first place – soon dominated my thoughts once again, fuelling my old insecurities concerning my looks, and so I allowed it to grow again, this time keeping it tightly in check with a weekly savage trim. It’s greyer, more distinguished-looking than before – and still Bristol’s dance club denizens take not a jot of notice. I’m just as invisible with it as I was without it.
C’est la vie.
After a certain age, Bob, we’re all invisible to women of a certain age.
–David
June 20, 2007 at 9:39 am
archiearchive
I once shaved my beard off – it took around five hours in a group of friends before the first person noticed – – –
So, you’ve been there, too, archie!
–David
June 20, 2007 at 2:34 pm
wizzer
Captivating – a great story about changing relationships. As you know David, my kind of story – lots of whys!
I have to recommend a DVD to you, wizzer, of a French film adapted from a French novel by its author for the screen. I haven’t read the novel, but the film “La Mustache” is nothing but questions, artfully posed, insufficiently resolved, tantalizing all the way through.
–David
June 20, 2007 at 7:33 pm
Random Magus
…that was chilling!!!
Thank you, Random Magus, and welcome. I hope that means you’ll be back.
–David
June 21, 2007 at 2:40 am
wizzer
Thanks for the recommendation David. I’ll look it out – it sounds just “me”
I understand from one reader of French novels that the book, too, is a cracker.
–David
June 21, 2007 at 4:07 am
Jakes
I once decided to ditch the mustache, and my wife immediately noticed it. She asked me what I have done and was not very happy about it. When I kissed her, she realized I am not scratching her face anymore, and since then I have to shave.
Great story, David. I like your concept. A cup of coffee in one hand, and before I finished the cup, I have read more than one of your very short novels.
Looking forward to the next one.
That’s great Jakes. Let’s make it a habit, like a coffee break.
–David
June 21, 2007 at 6:31 am
kebelle
Great story!
Thanks, kebelle, and welcome to Very Short Novels!
–David
June 21, 2007 at 6:40 am
Pam
This made me think about how, three or four months ago, I came home to find my boyfriend sporting a buzz cut. He’d had one when we met, but had been letting it grow since and it had gotten long enough to curl at the nape of his neck. I noticed, but in a very strange way. I just felt sort of transported back in time to when I had met him, as if the last year and the gradual growth of hair were in my imagination and this was how it had always been. Not the same, I know, but your story brought back a memory! I love the short novel concept, by the way. I think I could stand a few lessons in being concise myself, so I will definitely read and learn!
I think you spent just the right number of words on that, Pam. Welcome to Very Short Novels!
–David
June 21, 2007 at 10:22 am
Lady Rose
Great story (as always). My hubby shaves more in the summer, but sometimes lets a beard and or mustache grow in the winter – I hardly notice sometimes too when he does shave it off. Lady Rose
Thank you, Lady Rose. And for leaving your first comment also, thank you.
–David
June 21, 2007 at 1:36 pm
bellevelma
My husband had a mustache once. By accident, he cut the end off one side while shaving the rest of his face. He trimmed the other side in an attempt to even it out, but took off too much, leaving it shorter on that side than the other. He kept going back and forth… a little trim on the right, a little trim on the left… By the time he had it evened out, there was nothing left. Three cheers to the slip of a razor!
Great stories, by the way.
Thank you, bellevelma! I was afraid you were setting us up for a hitler-mustache joke there.
–David
June 21, 2007 at 2:25 pm
dnial
Great story, from a simple matter, a mustache…
A good inspiration for my flash fiction.
*I wrote my flash in Bahasa*
Wow, flash in Bahasa! Indonesian or Malay?
–David
June 21, 2007 at 4:23 pm
litlove
I love the way this story concentrates on the rootedness of marriage, on the prosaic and tangible details of a shared life, only to build within that narrative a story of complete impossibility. It’s an extraordinary position that you create for the reader as well, in position of both sides of the impossible equation (he’s shaved the moustache and yet his wife denies the act). It’s a lovely little vortex you summon into being here with your usual economy. Oh and I’d just like to point out that not all men are invisible to a certain kind of woman after a certain age… it depends on the man.
Thank you, Litlove. That’s encouraging. I wasn’t sure I had accomplished what I set out to do. And, for the record, men of a certain age are very grateful to a certain kind of woman.
–David
June 21, 2007 at 5:20 pm
Harmony
I remember when my dad first shaved his beard and mustache off. I must have been anywhere between 5 and 10 years old (I don’t remember how old I was, just that I was young). I cried and ran into my room. He followed. It took a lot of prying to get me to look at him face to face. Finally, I started to laugh. Funny how now that I am older I tease him for the hair he has lost on his head. I call his little bald spot his doop and frequently wolf whistle at him just for fun. Oh, how things turn around!
His doop? He must really love that! Thank you for your visit and comment, Harmony.
–David
June 21, 2007 at 8:51 pm
ndpthepoetress
Oh how sad, yet sometimes so true. Ironically, often it is the Woman who grieves about this. Adorning a new outfit or hair style, the man seldom notices – she weeps. The fact is, married couples… do not notice. It is as if they have become accustom to a certain image and no amount of polishing or adorning will change the picture. Often many will not notice a new dent in their auto until much later because of this exact embossed image in their mind. Like ducklings when born will fixate on the first seen and attach themselves relentlessly. Just try telling that poor little duckling that the image in its mind is merely a cat – not a duck and the duckling will adamantly maintain – duck. Yet, for some reason – a lot of people still try to ruffle a few feathers in hopes of a compliment, validation they are still noticed, attractive… And more often than not, they merely hit a brick wall and come crumbling down emotionally.
Yes, sometimes a marriage is a duck. Thank you, ndpthepoetress!
–David
June 22, 2007 at 12:09 am
Miriam Robbins Midkiff
Very powerful, as evident by the range of emotions and comments left above. As I read, I became the main character and felt the hit to my solar plexus as he realized she had not noticed the change.
I’ve actually been witness to the exact opposite reaction: the dismay that comes about when I’ve gotten a new hairdo, for instance…as if to say, “Is that my wife? It doesn’t look like her anymore. Perhaps she’ll change, act differently. I just got used to the old ‘new’ her, and now she’s gone and changed again. I don’t like this!”
There is another possibility, that he didn’t have a mustache to begin with, that I will try to illuminate in Part Two.
–David
June 22, 2007 at 5:29 pm
Jack Stevison
I shaved mine off in October 1996, the exact same month my Dad shaved his. We got together for the first time afterward for dinner one day, neither one tipping the other off to the changes of face.
“Notice anything different about me?”, I asked.
He said, “Nope. You?”
“Nope.”
Finally after an hour at dinner together my stepmother said to me, “Hey, you shaved your mustache.” My Dad and I turned and looked at each other in amazement and laughed.
This story brought back that moment.
Good one, Jack. Thanks, and welcome to Very Short Novels.
–David
June 23, 2007 at 1:42 am
ndpthepoetress
What no mustache? “There is another possibility, that he didn’t have a mustache to begin with, that I will try to illuminate in Part Two. –David” You can not do this to your Readers! No, no…! Our emotions are invested here; our mental pictures have already taken root! Might I rally your Readers to protest this scandalous thought of yours! Ug- Writers sometimes 🙂
Glad to see you’re interested, ndpthepoetress. Thank you.
–David
June 23, 2007 at 8:08 pm
Miriam
Actually, I very much like the twist of the possibility that he didn’t have a mustache to begin with. I love to question, “What is reality, and what is illusion (or delusion!)?” David, I look forward to you writing Part Two! Don’t let me down, here!
As you see, Miriam, I have now posted the second installment. I hope ndpthepoetress will think of it as the second book in a trilogy, and not be sorry I couldn’t tell the whole story in just one book.
–David
June 26, 2007 at 4:44 am
VivienneQuek
When a woman fails to notice her man’s look, it could only mean 2 things. Either she is so comfortable with him that she’s not seeing the obvious or she is so disinterested that she cannot be bothered.
So it would seem. Thanks, Vivienne. Good to see you back again.
–David
July 2, 2007 at 11:14 am
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July 5, 2007 at 7:49 am
Crofty
I’m not a vain man but was I piqued when the removal of my beard aroused not a single comment amongst my colleagues. Piqued, not least, because the greying, offending article had the appearance of a Badger’s bottom which, I felt, made me look older.
Thanks for this reassuring, but slightly depressing, story.
Thanks, Crofty. We’re all better off for the loss of the badger.
–David
July 6, 2007 at 1:22 am
Avinash
David,
Great story! I’ve been subscribed to your RSS feed for last couple of months but never (probably) got the chance to leave a comment. I think the “Mustache” in the heading pulled my attention. 😉
I didn’t use to keep mustache but once I made a mistake to keep it for a whole month and now my GF won’t let me shave it!
– Avi
Thanks, Avi. This series has attracted a lot of first-time comments.
–David
July 13, 2007 at 12:12 am
briseis
Moving quickly to read 2 and 3….
I am following along in your comments, so I’ll catch up with you at 3.
–David
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