The light is good in Interrogation A. Not so bright I can’t think. And it doesn’t buzz like those godawful fluorescents in B that made it so hard to remember the truth. I’ve been here since yesterday. They’re starting to like me. Detective Shimansky is very patient; he asks me the same questions over and over; at first I didn’t understand, but now I see he’s helping me remember what happened. I’m trying to repress it. I guess I would. I don’t know where I’ll go when they let me leave. It was only Mom and me, and now, I guess, they’ll find a place for me. They can’t let me live alone. I asked Detective Shimansky if I could live with him. I was surprised to hear myself say it when they played the tape back. I told him he was a father figure and he said it would be a remarkable turn of events, so I guess he’s working on it. I could use a parent now. He told me just to concentrate on telling my story and everything would work itself out. So that’s what I’m trying to do, so I can live with him. There’s still some details I’m missing. I think I got the straight-razor right. I can’t seem to remember how long I stayed at the youth group or when I left; the timeline doesn’t match up yet. I really need to sleep. We’re going to go through it one more time and I’ll try to honor my mother’s memory and give her the respect she deserves and also keep in mind the physical evidence and start a new life with the mercy of the court and a clean conscience and start a new life with Detective Shimansky’s family and a clean conscience.
Copyright © July 01, 2007 David Hodges
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July 1, 2007 at 3:33 am
wizzer
Erasing of unpleasantness and hope for the future. How very well told.
Thanks, wizzer.
–David
July 1, 2007 at 11:35 am
circumstance
i love it, even i not 100% understand the story was..
(^.^) but i like to read it..
I’m amazed you even try, circumstance. Thanks.
–David
July 1, 2007 at 1:48 pm
litlove
There’s an extraordinarily Beckettian feel to this one (well, to me, at least) and yet where Beckett kept his characters on the knife edge of risibility, your emotional field is far more complex, David, and more poignant. On the one hand this stream of consciousness narrative constructs a neat position for the protagonist to occupy, in need of rescue, seeking a father figure, and yet the layers and hints and signs undermine this coherence at every cunning twist in each sentence. Experience, memory, innocence are all put in doubt as quickly as they are evoked. I found this clever and powerful.
Thank you Litlove. My narrators tend to live on that knife edge of uncertainty about their own identity and past, in this case, further undermined by the detective, whose job it is to create certainty, give away nothing.
–David
July 1, 2007 at 1:51 pm
Miss Million
Detective Shimansky will be sold like hot cake very soon! 🙂
He will make Agent 007 flop. But I wish I were given the role by some Hollywood director. 🙂
Anyways, nice story again.
Really, Miss Million? I don’t see a big market for Shimansky. But you can certainly audition. We’ll change the line to mother figure.
–David
July 3, 2007 at 10:59 am
the scholar
david, your stories are wonderful. what an innovative way to express your creativity! i’m so happy i found your blog — keep up the good work!
Why, thank you, roadsidescholar! I’m happy you found me, too!
–David
July 3, 2007 at 3:16 pm
Jon
Interesting Story!
Jon
Thanks, Jon, and welcome to Very Short Novels!
–David
July 13, 2007 at 12:09 am
briseis
Another touching one!
You’re getting better – and here I didn’t think it was possible!
Maybe you’re a better reader, Briseis.
–David
I’d hope so.