Limping from the crash site, she resumed the inventory she’d begun while hauling her legs from the driver’s seat: legs, two arms, fingers and thumbs, head, scalp, blood. She’d been driving fast on the rain-slick freeway to the casino, sorting through the cookies in a lidless tupperware on the passenger’s seat, singing with the radio, looking for the one with the most chips. Suddenly her lane was red with brake lights. Cookie between her teeth, she kissed the car ahead of her as she passed it on the left, skidded away and steered into the skid, kissed another, skidded and steered and kissed a third, this one hard, enough to make her spill her drink, like a loose bride at a receiving line. It made her laugh. When she had to choose again, she swerved onto the gravel shoulder in order to live, across the little grassy green, and into the oncoming lanes. She’d always known something would make her stop. Now she knew it was the left headlight of the dark sedan. The impact was nothing she could have prepared for. A moment of blackness followed. The roof and the side she could see of her car through the drizzle were crumpled: by what, she couldn’t say. It lay smoking beside a pile of noisy wreckage. The earth leading to it was scraped clean. In her head, a very loud high-pitched tone told her nothing, but she did remember, like revelation, a moment of exhilarated coming to be. When had that been? The scene lay there like a deck of picture cards, face up. She couldn’t see the sense in them, or how to arrange them in suits. Chips of glass on the shoulder glinted with firelight. Something was burning. She needed a cigarette. She needed another car.
Copyright © August 25, 2007 David Hodges
12 comments
Comments feed for this article
August 25, 2007 at 4:15 pm
Anonymous
Wow! The impact took my breath away!
Thanks! Wish you hadn’t logged in as Anonymous, but welcome to Very Short Novels!
–David
Now I need a smoke.
August 25, 2007 at 6:03 pm
Miss Wisabus
Very powerful imagery.
Thanks, Miss!
–David
August 26, 2007 at 7:47 am
keshuvko
She needed another car! 🙂 And I too need one. 🙂
OK.
–David
August 26, 2007 at 8:12 am
ramon
Man, David! Very, very well done.
Thanx for that.
You’re welcome, Ramon.
–David
August 26, 2007 at 1:24 pm
briseis
This novel was, so to say, a smashing success. Very clear, very vivacious.
Yeah, no lane-dodging here! Just a good old narrative smash-em-up! Thanks, Briseis!
–David
August 27, 2007 at 4:51 am
nursemyra
that’s convinced me to stop eating chocolate chip cookies while driving
Well, something had to! Thanks nursemyra.
–David
August 27, 2007 at 7:11 am
shyloh
I certainly don’t know how you do it but you do it well ha.
Thanks, shyloh! If I did anything else well, I’d be a force to contend with.
–David
August 27, 2007 at 11:20 am
Anna
Wow, like always, enjoyed reading this very short novel.
Thanks Anna. Always appreciate your visits and comments!
–David
August 27, 2007 at 4:01 pm
litlove
And so she walks away uninjured, and it’s a secular miracle you describe here, David. There’s such a jauntiness to the writing, a kind of loose hilarity, summed up in that brilliant line about the plastered bride that sits unaccountably well with the event of the smash. It’s like an epiphany that doesn’t mean anything, crashing and managing by chance to survive. I thought it was an amazing piece of writing. Oh and by the way, I know you are a force to contend with.
Well, that’s very kind, Litlove, thank you. As for the wasted epiphany, all I can say is: Some people never learn.
–David
August 27, 2007 at 9:13 pm
grantman
Dave . . . a good friend was just in a bad car accident and this put me there . . . she is fine now . . . but wow . . .
grantman
Nothing entertaining about the reality. Thanks, grantman.
–David
August 28, 2007 at 7:06 am
Manictastic
That was amazing. You described the crash so vividly and left me speechless which apparently is easier to do than I thought. Amazing, truly amazing.
Thank you Manictastic! I’m glad you recovered your voice to leave me a comment. Very thoughtful.
–David
September 9, 2007 at 2:30 am
wizzer
“like a loose bride at a receiving line” – brilliant how you weave such a humourous phrase into such a gripping story.
Thanks, Wizzer. I’m glad it works for you.
–David