I’ve seen this movie fifty-nine times, but that’s not why it knows me. It’s set in a country that’s not my own, at a time I can only imagine. Mysterious things happen to families unlike families I know—still mysterious on a sixtieth viewing, though I know everything that will happen, and when, and every line. I am a girl separated from her family by war, a refugee adopted by strangers also fleeing. We live a life of hiding and crossings at night. I am a child with a blunt haircut and sorrowful, shining eyes, uprooted and robbed of her childhood and home, whose only offense is that she loves her new family better. I hope that my real parents and my whining little sister never find me. The movie watches me. It wonders if I wish them dead. It gets to know me better. The shimmering screen casts its broad glow out into the murky theater, looking for someone with empty seats to his left and his right and sees us for who we are, and shows us whatever we see. The actors are all amateurs. They act like anybody you might know, and stumble through their scenes hoping the script will save them, but the movie is a pro. It always triumphs in the end, but sometimes the ending comes early. When mother makes the soup tonight, in a can on an open flame, I know there will be nothing but onions in the broth, the hardest-working onions ever pulled from the earth, pale slivers to carry all the love I’ve lost. Tonight they make me weep. I get up and stumble toward the exit sign. There’s no war here in the colorful hallways of the multiplex, but there are refugees. Maybe it’s time to go home.
Copyright © August 31, 2007 David Hodges
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August 31, 2007 at 1:51 pm
Cyberpenguin
I love this very short novel you wrote! It’s very poignant. Excellent work!
-Corey the Cyberpenguin
Thanks, Corey, and welcome to Very Short Novels!
–David
August 31, 2007 at 3:26 pm
Kathleen Maher
That was the only word I could find to describe the sweet, sad sigh lingering after “Surprise Ending.” Poignant. That and…lingering.
It’s hard not to take that as a compliment, Kathleen. Thank you very much.
–David
August 31, 2007 at 4:05 pm
Gautam
David this is wonderful! I notice the nod with the number 59. Thank you for the idea that is the 299- I’ve received praise for doing Cinema 299 and I owe it all to you. I plan to post a few more in the coming days- each featuring a link to one of your 299s.
Hope this little chain reaction spreads further. Cheers!
And thank you, Gautam! Cinema 299 is quite a tribute, and I wouldn’t have thought to write this piece if it hadn’t been for yours.
–David
August 31, 2007 at 6:13 pm
Ed Hardy, Jr.
I found your work through its mention on Broken Projector and I have to say I’m rather impressed. I was initially attracted to the idea because I’ve recently been constraining myself to an exact word-count as well, with my “24 words per film” series. I followed Gautam’s lead with my own 299 word piece on cinema, but–I’m not ashamed to say–I’m rather outclassed by both of you.
I’m just glad you’re here, Ed. Thanks for your kind words. I followed the thread the other direction to your site as well and would recommend it to anyone with an interest in film.
–David
September 1, 2007 at 4:48 am
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September 1, 2007 at 6:24 am
Vi
One of the best I’ve seen from you so far. Keep it up, David! (I stalk you through my WP Blogroll, hehe).
Thank you, Vi! It can’t be stalking if you’re waving from the shadows!
–David
September 1, 2007 at 10:17 pm
WalksFarWoman
Oh David what have you done? There is a ‘299 DBD Phenomenon’ taking the world by storm! 🙂
My son works in the city so now I attempt to write a ‘299 Novel’ for him most nights so he can read it on the tube in the morning. He is dreadfully scathing, hypercritical and downright dismissive – he says I am ‘show boating’, packing too much into it and creating too much tension with pitiful endings. I shall keep trying, I can only get better. I just wanted you to know what you have done to me. (sigh)
‘Surprise Ending’ – Loved it!
Kindest Regards – WFW.
I feel your pain, WFW. I’m certain I couldn’t write one every night and get good results, if that’s any help. As for scathing criticism, I only hope it keeps you on your toes.
Yours in showboating,
–David
September 2, 2007 at 5:51 am
WSPC
I just love your stories and have given your site a plug on my travel website simply because I get so much enjoyment out of your writing. Thank you.
Thank you so much WSPC. I find long waits in airports the perfect time to write, and read. Welcome to Very Short Novels.
–David
September 2, 2007 at 10:41 am
briseis
David,
I’m so thrilled to see everyone here loving on you and your work.
You deserve all of it.
This is an amazing piece.
Thank you Briseis. Only you can say you’ve been encouraging me all the way back to Blogster!
–David
September 2, 2007 at 12:36 pm
Miki
this is a powerful story and i love the clarity and sharpness of the images you draw with your words. you know the power of brevity and how a few choice words can say more than a thousand every could.
while i am not sure i understand exactly what is going on, i did feel myself pulled through two different times and places, two people melding into one commonality.
i guess we each interpret an author’s work differently. once he writes and publishes his work, it isn’t his anymore to define exactly what is going on but instead to the reader to take their own experiences and morph it into something personal. which is what i did. being adopted myself and estranged from a culture that has suddenly found me in my twenties, i know what being lost is like.
Thank you, mikkers, and welcome to Very Short Novels. Respond to my email if you like, and we can chat more about your reactions. I’m intrigued by your own story.
–David
September 9, 2007 at 2:38 am
wizzer
What sadness – “only offense is that she loves her new family better” Another time and place that may be different. David, I’ve noticed an increase in praising comments rather than just comments on your work. I’m so pleased – I hope you are enjoying it.
Consider me tickled! Thanks, Wizzer.
–David