The kids are playing Doctor in the sandbox. Our first concern is what they use for instruments but we let them have their space. We see them in profile from the house earnest and still. Their lips are moving.
—Where does it hurt?
—Everywhere. I suffer from a general malaise.
—It’s called Western civilization.
She takes our son’s head in both her hands and massages his temples with the tips of her thumbs. Their naturalness is worrisome, but we know if we prohibit it, they’ll never get enough.
—Does this feel better?
—It does, but complicatedly so.
—Because of the touching?
—Massage is therapy, but the touching is political, isn’t it?
—When I do it to you?
—Or when I do it to you, and frankly sensual.
—But without being sexual.
—But without being sexual, and yet.
She paused and pressed her thumbs in harder, scrunching her eyebrows with the effort. We leaned toward the window straining to hear, watching their lips for clues.
—And yet?
—Affectionate between pairs who might,
—If we were ready for it,
—If we were ready for it, be sexual partners, but creepy otherwise.
I rattled the blinds with my forehead. For a moment, they were still.
—For instance?
—For instance, I shudder to think of my brother doing it, or my coach.
—Or your Mom.
—Or my Mom, unless I was dying, or really sick. But your Mom could you. I guess she could me. But my Dad could neither.
—It’s only my thumbs on your temples.
They flipped the timer and traded roles. The muffled chirping of their voices fell silent. He kneaded her temples.
—So why are your parents watching from the window through the blinds?
They swiveled in tandem and looked straight at us. We stepped back into the darkness.
Copyright © November 28, 2007 David Hodges
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November 29, 2007 at 7:12 pm
Virgilius Sade
This is rather disturbing knowing that the kids are doing this and thinking about western civilization and sex at the same time, or it is a pass at Western Culture and early sexualization of children in this day and age?
Thanks, Virgilius. I didn’t think anything I could write would disturb you.
–David
November 30, 2007 at 6:54 pm
briseis
Actually, I can’t think of a better analogy for western civilization….
(very creepy piece)
Thank you, Briseis. Yeah, it’s creepy.
–David
December 1, 2007 at 3:37 pm
Litlove
I think this is a wonderful vsn. I’m particularly intrigued by the role of the parents here, trying to hold back, unable to prevent themselves from intervening, watching as both authority and voyeurs. The ending when they get caught out in their spying and step back from the window is pure class.
Thank you, Litlove. I may have failed to indicate, though I tried in three places, that they aren’t able to hear and must interpret—who knows how well?—what the children are saying.
–David
December 3, 2007 at 2:06 pm
Wizzer
Brilliantly confusing first few reads. Always a great challenge to seek out the real meaning.
Sorry, Wizzer. Writing should reward multiple readings but not require them. This needs fixing.
–David
December 3, 2007 at 3:54 pm
Wizzer
It’s not your writing I promise. It’s the depth I find in it (whether intentional or not) that challenges me to think deeper and to re-explore my initial understanding. Please don’t change!
I can’t promise not to change, Wizzer, but I’ll leave this one alone if you insist.
–David
December 7, 2007 at 9:37 am
modoathii
no, no don’t change. quite brilliant i must say…okay, i’ve got to stop commenting with the usual ‘brilliant brilliant’…but i can’t bring myself not to. i love the surprise element…
That’s one more vote for no change. Thank you, modoathi.
–David
December 7, 2007 at 4:27 pm
grasshopperkm
Right on point for me. Unlike most people, I consider all children sexual.They’re human, after all, no matter how young.True, their sexuality may assume such amorphous longings as to pass for perfect innocence. Adults may not prefer to name their initial signs of desire as something more palatable. Perhaps that’s often necessary to protect the children from adults who have no business tampering with them here, be their state comparable to the chrysalis or a flower’s first bud-like shape.The parents watching these kids, however, see what’s real, and respect it as the children’s own, offering us a fascinating and thought-provoking story.
Thanks, Kathleen! This is instructive for me, to hear so many points of view on a story. I appreciate your taking the time. Don’t you want to invite readers to follow you back to diary of a heretic?
–David
December 8, 2007 at 2:34 pm
Will O. Treigh
Brought back childhood memories.
Good one, Will! Thanks for your comment and welcome to Very Short Novels.
–David