During the funeral in his old hometown he didn’t give it a thought but when he needed a ride to the airport and couldn’t think who to ask he discovered he was in all the world alone in that particular way, drizzled on and rideless to any airport, clutching a damp prayer card. He hadn’t counted his losses during the ceremony but now they filed past in something like a funeral procession with their lights on and flying little flags. His parents had died in the natural course, younger than is called for, but not impolitely so. Two siblings and a host of indifferent friends had preceded him. Even the friends he cherished had passed without alarm. He hadn’t kept count until none were left. He said goodbye to the people he knew as one by one they got into their cars and pulled into the procession leaving the cemetery and when the last of them had gone and he still stood there in the gloom alone by an open grave he thought, At last. Now I can live. Thumb up, head high, chin to the wet wind, he hitched his first ride to the airport, or nearly. The driver took his overcoat and his wallet fat with traveler’s checks and left him coatless, damaged and broke on a roadside far from any place he knew. The sun went down into a hole in the horizon. He saw the prayer card clinging to his shoe and chuckled a humorless curse. Her car was battered, once-green and trembled to his touch as he opened the door. The cabin was an inferno that smelled of cheese. That’s a nasty cut, she said. It likes you, he told her and they both laughed. He thought, This is a woman I could marry.
Copyright © December 12, 2007 David Hodges
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December 12, 2007 at 9:50 pm
lissa
I like the ending. I was expecting a sad ending but this one is just right for this story.
Thank you, lissa and welcome to Very Short Novels.
–David
December 12, 2007 at 11:46 pm
whypaisley
this is really good david… i am working on a similar piece… much much longer tho,, inspired by a poem i wrote a couple of days ago entitled….
“road signs”
Thanks, paisley. I read your intriguing poem yesterday. I’m fascinated by hitchhikers and all half-choice/half-chance encounters.
–David
December 13, 2007 at 1:10 am
briseis
Wow. This is beautiful! It’s sad, of course, especially as we can see the truth and the vivid reality shining through your lovely mask of words. But there’s a bit of gentle hope to it, isn’t there?
I know I’m pulling for the guy. Thanks, Briseis.
–David
December 13, 2007 at 5:04 am
modoathii
hahahaha. and we meet in the strangest of ways. goes to show every cloud has that lining…yeah, that one…the silver one.
Thanks for the laugh, modoathii.
–David
December 13, 2007 at 9:09 am
grantman
sometimes meeting your past head on will do that to ya!! enjoyed it big time…
grantman
Thanks, grantman!
–David
December 14, 2007 at 10:00 pm
Blondie
have just found you and am so enchanted. I shall be back for more.
Blondie
Thank you, Blondie and welcome to Very Short Novels.
–David
December 17, 2007 at 1:22 pm
Wizzer
One day I’ll learn that I can expect a different ending to the one I’m expecting! Great story, I really enjoyed this – a lighter ending to something potentially so sad.
Thanks, Wizzer. I find it startling, too, that so few words can have second and third acts, but then, they wouldn’t be novels if they were single scenes.
–David
December 20, 2007 at 10:48 pm
Jack Payne
Where the ending fits, wear it.
Thanks, Jack and welcome to Very Short Novels.
–David
January 27, 2010 at 7:42 am
Owen Gray
The response to “that’s a nasty cut” was superb. I wished that, in the past, I had the wit to use it.
Thanks, Owen. Gladly fiction gives us time to gather our wits about us. Too often in life a few seconds separate wit from wished.
–David