Boy meets girl, girl bites boy, boy sees doctor. This is fact. We can verify this. Boy is intrigued but girl moves away before satisfying his curiosity. With its motives and suggestions, this is narrative. The boy works days and moonlights nights as a private detective to earn enough money to follow the girl to Chicago; meanwhile the girl also works two jobs but without declaring whether she’s saving to move back or to move on. This is plot, notoriously wordy, seductive, a trap for the unwary. The boy is coming down with something. From a dark car across the street from the house of a man, his client, whose fortune came from vending machines, he watched for indiscretion. The wife was home. A motorcyclist steered into the driveway like the night before. Light from the lamppost glinted across his hatchet face. The man entered the house; the boy was right behind him. I don’t need much, he told them. Fourteen hundred dollars in singles and I am on my way; the husband never needs to know. The girl picked up the boy at the airport. I’m sick, he told her, over you. She bit him like a flu shot high on his arm. That’s—he bit her back—better, he told her. His bite pounded a stake into the ground. Her bite turned a boy into a man and a man into a meal and then sent the meal back to the kitchen. This is poetry, equally dangerous, friendless and not a good listener, not to be trusted when there are facts to establish, story to tell. They can’t kiss except by locking teeth. They don’t eat out of hunger. He can’t be healthy with or without her, and she is just a girl who likes to bite.
Copyright © January 02, 2008 David Hodges
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January 2, 2008 at 6:16 pm
Mollie Bryant
Hmm, I like short shorts. Enjoying the blog.
Well, thank you, Mollie Bryant, and welcome to Very Short Novels!
–David
January 2, 2008 at 10:55 pm
briseis
This seems to me, David, a portrait of you in your top form. It’s exciting and engaging, and just barely vague enough to be intriguing and deeply personal all at once. Bravo!
Thank you, Briseis. Are you asking if I bite?
–David
January 3, 2008 at 12:12 pm
Wizzer
What did the doctor have to say, I wonder? “This is plot, notoriously wordy, seductive, a trap for the unwary” — so with you David, as always I run the risk of the trap if I am not wary of what I’m reading.
I’m just recommending a little caution is all, Wizzer. Thanks for the great question.
–David
January 3, 2008 at 12:45 pm
grantman
aha yes, the big sleep — over until your heart breaks — then melts over a cheeseburger you dropped in the booth, calling her late one night from the bar; drunk and never to have a first love again…
Very good…very good indeed..
grantman
Buck up, man, it’s just a sandwich. Thanks, grantman.
–David
January 3, 2008 at 4:43 pm
litlove
I love your rabid romance, David, that crosses genres in its attempt to reach a happy ending in the way more conventional love stories might cross obstacles. Yes, love is contagion and violence and transgression and dark, dark humour. Quite a while ago now someone described your writing as the best kind of bitter black chocolate, and I think that’s a beautifully apt description of this delicious vsn treat.
Thank you, Litlove. You read me so well. I sit here now examining a selection of actual holiday chocolates, wondering if there’s one I can’t live without.
–David
January 6, 2008 at 9:23 am
pmousse
The final line is my favourite. She is just a girl who likes to bite. Nice.
Thanks, pmousse. Sorry I missed your New Year’s Pamplemousse Party. I was planning to crash it.
–David
January 8, 2008 at 3:11 am
Rootzpoet
Hi David
I must say I enjoyed this clever weaving of word and events in this story. As part of my 2008 goal I have every intention of visiting more master writers such as yourself. Outside of reading great work one cannot help but become a better writer from reading work such as yours.
Duane
You are too kind, Duane. Happy New Year and good luck with those resolutions!
–David
January 8, 2008 at 6:57 pm
Greg
Very nice, I’ve always been a big fan of short and to the point writing.
Well and briefly said, Greg. Thank you and welcome to Very Short Novels.
–David