On the edge of my bed, his outline brightened by moonlight, his profile sharp and reassuring just as it was, then later at the market his round shoulder turning, hawk’s brow silent and still, his little cap tipped so familiarly, thereafter whenever I need him, each time his age the age I am, as if he were living his life alongside mine as a comfort, as if in verbless scenes of being we result. In times of crisis, his firm hand. If he were me,. To know again the abundance of being unabandoned, not bereft! Everywhere reminders of him carried on the breeze or taking the empty seat beside me. But also as before, formed of fog against the mirror in the room where I have showered, his contours edgeless and vague, a reluctant awareness—at times when I am decidedly alone—of his uninvited presence. Wind beneath the door. Faces changing on the street from theirs to his. Questions asked by strangers in his voice I almost answer. And hands, determined, familiar hands in my hair not mine on a night when I’m home by myself. I need a good night’s sleep and soon. Will I dream? Scenes of my life shaped as shadows chased by failing light through the windows across my bedroom walls. This room where only I belong, this bed which should be mine alone, instead, a hand on my shoulder which I make real by taking it in mine. Fine. Let’s do this, then. Whatever you’re up to, but on my terms this time, understood? You’re not finished with me yet? Hear this. I’m not finished with you. You think nobody owns the dead? You’re mine. And I will make of you whatever I need and everyone will know what you were to me.
Copyright © January 26, 2008 David Hodges
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January 26, 2008 at 11:57 am
litlove
I am so happy to see you have posted – I was getting a little desperate for a VSN fix. And now I am richly rewarded. This is exquisite, but I haven’t had time to feel all its layers yet. I hope to be back with a more thoughtful comment later.
Boy, did you ever! Thank you, Litlove.
–David
January 27, 2008 at 3:15 am
Jillian
Wow… Makes you wonder who exactly can’t let go. Nicely done. Thanks!
Thank you, Jillian. This haunting does seem to go both ways.
–David
January 27, 2008 at 8:01 am
Wizzer
David, personally I think this one is amongst your very best. The “not letting go” syndrome captured as a thing of beauty. Is this all in the mind or for real. Perception is reality so maybe your title is truly accurate.
Thanks, Wizzer. Either way, I like that we can argue whether the ghost is real instead of arguing whether ghosts are real.
–David
January 27, 2008 at 2:26 pm
Melanie-bd
Very very good. I loved it. It could almost be a prose poem. Just the stuff I love to write about. Thank God someone is out there thinking and weaving words and images. Well done!
love-bd
Well, good. I’m glad you found me, Melanie. Welcome to Very Short Novels.
–David
January 27, 2008 at 4:49 pm
litlove
‘as if in verbless scenes of being we result’ – what a wonderful phrase. You really are one of the very, very best writers on the net. I love the way that verbless being plays out as a series of metamorphoses and transactions. Of course talking to the dead should really mean negotiating with them – that’s exactly right. And of course loss only shows us how paradoxically attached to people we are. Just beautiful.
Thank you so much, Litlove. I’m glad the technique pays off for you. It’s ridiculously difficult to sustain a series of fragments, equally difficult to read, I would think, but I had to try.
–David
January 27, 2008 at 9:42 pm
briseis
This is gorgeous, David. One of my very favourites. Exquisite, poignant, a perfect portrait of loss (on both sides).
Thank you, Briseis. I honestly didn’t know whether this one succeeded or not but I’m beginning to think it must have value.
–David
January 28, 2008 at 9:52 am
wailin
Must have value? Surely, you jest. Nothing here has been found without worth so far. In everything I can see what I want to be as a writer. You are an inspiration to the rest of us. Never forget that.
Okay. Thanks, wailin!
–David
January 28, 2008 at 9:23 pm
grantman
“You’re not finished with me yet? Hear this. I’m not finished with you” …ooh this one gave me a chill….no one is at peace here….very nicely done… this one has a lot of levels!
grantman
Thanks. There’s more than one way to treat your ghosts, grantman!
–David
January 31, 2008 at 2:58 am
verbivore
I love the sharpness hinted at in this narrator’s grief, just that tiny bit of anger, the frustration. But also the reality of not wanting to be left alone, even if the presence is only, as you so exquisitely say, “in verbless scenes of being we result.”
Very powerful, David.
Thank you, verbivore. You’re so good at detailing the nuances of feeling.
–David