We started with an exchange of thumbs-ups, not because they fully conveyed our feelings but because we were plummeting toward earth rather quickly and needed a shorthand gesture for Yes, we will live; isn’t it exciting? I tell you it was beautiful, our unanimity in that moment, like a perfect cantaloupe to a lover of cantaloupe who’s been disappointed too often and almost given up on cantaloupe. And not just the flavor but perfect in color too, its flesh tender, sweet as a kiss, chilled but not chilly. We had parachutes but hers did not look right, not that I’m an expert. So, how to communicate this to her, that, while I wasn’t sure her chute would malfunction, neither could I rule it out? What angle of the thumb says that? While I grappled with hand-grammar, her grip on the ripcord handle was quietly eloquent. I didn’t want to panic her or let her pull that cord, so I started to swim in the air. Flat to the earth and arms outstretched ahead of me, my knuckles touching in the breast stroke first position, I bent my fingers ever so slightly to coax my body in her direction and stayed her hand. She made herself smaller and joined me at my altitude and watched my eyes (and watched my eyes!) and was patient. Unlike gravity. I had time for one more sign, the one that on land means Come here, but in our case meant Give me your hand and live to tell the story. I don’t know how much of that she understood, but she gave me her hand and let me embrace her and we sailed to earth sharing my one ‘chute and the rest is no more important to me than whether hers would have opened.
Copyright © February 27, 2008 David Hodges
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February 28, 2008 at 8:41 am
archiearchive FCD
Whew. I was so sure this was a tragedy. Now I am totally relieved!
I guess it wouldn’t have been the first time—this month!—a story was narrated by the deceased. Thanks, Archie.
–David
February 28, 2008 at 1:51 pm
briseis
Beautiful, wonderful. I love the concept of “hand grammar.”
Why, thank you, Briseis. I’m fond of that little phrase myself.
–David
February 29, 2008 at 4:34 am
Lupideloop (the first Mike)
A great little piece this is! Took a few minutes to read but felt like an age.
Thanks, Mike! I was trying to play with time a bit, to heighten the suspense of where their story would end.
–David
February 29, 2008 at 11:24 am
wailin
The rest is sex, isn’t it? It is! Right… yeah.. no… yes! Maybe?
Whatever do you mean, wailin? Tender flesh of cantaloupe? The breast stroke? Her fingers on the ripcord handle? Technical terms all, I assure you.
–David
March 2, 2008 at 8:11 am
grantman
Wailin nailed this one…I have been contemplating it waiting to hear what others had to say because something about it just wasn’t right…… I was free falling all the way!! Good one…
Grantman
Don’t wait too long to pull that ripcord, Grantman. The ground can hit you pretty fast.
–David
March 2, 2008 at 9:54 am
litlove
I came across a book in the university library called ‘Sex and Fantasy’ so naturally I took it out, but it turned out to be something a little different to my expectations. In it, one of the experiments undertaken was to ask a group of men and a group of women to finish a story in which a couple of trapeze artists made a mistake in their performance and the woman’s hands slipped through those of the man. Almost without exception the men ended the tale in apocalypse – the death of the woman, and the man sometimes, and even the explosion of the entire circus arena, whereas the women repeatedly found ways to resolve and rescue the situation. All this to say, I’m glad, and not at all surprised, David, to find you bucking the trend. Although you could also look at it as a perfect rescue fantasy, but that’s quite enough from me already.
Indeed it is a perfect rescue fantasy, Litlove. The narrator is rescued from empty recklessness by a moment of unanimity.
–David
March 3, 2008 at 8:06 am
Wizzer
Ah those first impressions again. An easy going rescue lead me into the story within the story – (were they strangers?) but for me the last line typifies the male species – I’m almost sorry he didn’t light up as well!
Good point, Wizzer. There’s nothing in the story that indicates they aren’t strangers.
–David