Travelers are forever being told the whens and wheres of the city: when the church was reconstructed, where the Romans took their baths, how the rains affect the rosemary crop, but all they really want to know is why the sad man shuffles on his knees from one end of town to the other, starting at the granary in the morning and tracking the weary sun throughout the day to the bruised clouds just before dusk above the little chapel. A woman waits for him there, but turns her back as he draws near. “He’s no sadder than anyone else,” we tell them. He was a charming young man, athletic and witty, who had his pick of girls. She was underendowed but aloof. They should never have met and hadn’t before he helped her onto a tram. One phrase only of what they said is repeated every day: “Not in your lifetime,” she told him, he tells us, we tell them. Their courtship was a riddle no one could solve, their engagement unexpected as a tuba, but the biggest surprise were the wedding invitations which went only to the unlikeliest single women and men, “plus one.” The chapel brimmed with unprecedence. “I know a reason why this couple should not wed,” said a woman carrying a baby boy, though she needn’t have: everyone knew at least one. When the bride saw the look that passed between this woman and the groom, she crushed the bouquet underfoot and walked away. “This is the woman he crawls to every day?” ask the tourists. “No,” we tell them. “She was pregnant at the altar; this woman is her daughter.” “The man is making amends to his daughter?” the tourists persist. “No. He has long since died. The crawling man is his son.”
Copyright © August 10, 2008 David Hodges
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August 10, 2008 at 1:19 pm
meena iyer
Interesting 🙂
Thanks, meena. Good to see you back so soon at Very Short Novels.
–David
August 12, 2008 at 12:20 am
meor@maru
haha… that’s smart… and yeah, interesting…
Thanks, meor. After a visit back to your blog, I found someone else who shares your distaste for Tom Tom Bak http://faizaldardin.blogspot.com/2007/12/tom-tom-bak-bak-balik-my-tv.html
–David
August 14, 2008 at 1:58 pm
litlove
I was reading this wondering whether there was an opposite to ‘metonymic.’ At every junction in this story’s journey you take your reader to another unexpected place. The narrative still works by association, only the associations are unconventional, subversive, troubling ones. Tales of the unexpected indeed! Roald Dahl salutes you – he never managed to write one as unprecedented as this.
Start out with a man walking on his knees and these sorts of things just happen, Litlove! I learned the details as I wrote. Thank you very much.
–David
August 19, 2008 at 11:08 am
grantman
one of your best stories yet… this one has plot, action, mystery and undertones! His son? Oh boy, time for another re-read!
grantman
Thanks, Grantman, I really appreciate that. Don’t work too hard on the undertones. This one’s just for fun.
–David
August 21, 2008 at 12:02 pm
Wizzer at Guru fodder
Didn’t see that one coming!
I need another re-read – who’s related to who?
But you did see something coming, right? Thanks, Wizzer.
–David
August 21, 2008 at 2:31 pm
Wizzer at Guru fodder
Of course, but with your writing I know to read every last word and still expect the unexpected!
Good. Thanks, Wizzer! You’ve really outdone yourself with comments this week. I hope you know how very gratified I am to hear from you so often.
–David
September 6, 2008 at 12:17 pm
briseis
Here’s a poem that made me IMMEDIATELY think of this story when our English teacher read it to us.
Wild Geese – by Mary Oliver
You do not have to be good.
You do not have to walk on your knees
for a hundred miles through the desert repenting.
You only have to let the soft animal of your body
love what it loves.
Tell me about despair, yours, and I will tell you mine.
Meanwhile the world goes on.
Meanwhile the sun and the clear pebbles of the rain
are moving across the landscapes,
over the prairies and the deep trees,
the mountains and the rivers.
Meanwhile the wild geese, high in the clean blue air,
are heading home again.
Whoever you are, no matter how lonely,
the world offers itself to your imagination,
calls to you like the wild geese, harsh and exciting –
over and over announcing your place
in the family of things.
I’m flattered and delighted by the connection, Briseis. Mysterious indeed are the birds and fish who make the trip they’ve never made as if they knew where they were going, but more mysterious than those are the butterflies, none of which lives long enough to make even one complete trip before they pass on what they’ve never known to the next generation. At least they don’t have to do it on their knees! Thank you for sharing the beautiful poem and the fact that you think of me when you read.
–David
September 8, 2008 at 2:21 am
briseis
It was the second line that triggered it. 🙂
I went for the same trigger, Briseis, but then, once I got started . . . .
–David