We sit at a table in The Glade—a room named for the sappy paintings of pastoral scenes on its walls. Their grasses and trees are carefully balanced and in them nothing lurks or lives. Their author may never have been outdoors. My son stomps through these flat meadows sniffing for something to tree, to bother, to chase, to eat, to kill. He’s eight. His father sits across the table smiling beatifically. It is so good to see me doing so well. My new hair suits me. What do the staff think of my progress? While he sits with his questions, I take up the glass from the table and decorously into it spit. For two weeks I’ve been spitting whatever this tang is—new health, or the aftertaste of my favorite poisons. My glass is now half full. When I don’t answer, he offers an overly detailed runthrough of their plans for the day. Occasionally, our son corrects him, not for my understanding, but to let Dad know who’s boss now that his parents can’t conspire to shape his day. Come sit with your mother. She misses you. Although she hasn’t said so. He stands before me tall, fit and undeniable. I act as I always do. Taking my hands in his, and stepping on all of my toes, he pulls back and yanks me into an unsteady stand, unwillingly up from my chair, clutching his shoulders for balance. I do the safe thing as always and don’t react. We stroll the painted meadows until it’s time for them to go. Halfway to the exit, he says something to his dad and they bust up laughing with great relief and don’t look back. They’re joking about me. I don’t mind, compared to the fear they’ve already moved on.
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December 5, 2009 at 10:34 pm
shadylabartram
this is awesome. I just discovered your blog and i absolutely love it! Thank you for the great *novels*.
How is this possible, shady? I posted this just minutes ago! Thank you very much, and welcome to Very Short Novels!
–David
December 7, 2009 at 3:56 am
Morag
Thank you so much for these! They’re just long enough to satisfy my print addiction but short enough that they don’t take up study time.
The thing I love most about your stories is how much you tell us without ever actually saying it. In almost all of them, there’s some situation or event that you don’t name, you don’t describe, you just imply… and it’s always that touch that makes them so intense. I find I have to read them at least twice… once for the emotional punch and again for the hidden nuance.
The idea of the painted meadows really appeals to me for some reason. Maybe because that’s what we get fed so much nowadays; a perfect, sterile, dead world.
Thanks, Morag! This one in particular leaves a lot unsaid. I’m glad if they contain enough value to make you go back looking for clarification. Thank you for your comment and welcome to Very Short Novels!
–David
December 7, 2009 at 6:47 pm
Jared
Is she bitter and paranoid or happy and optimistic? Good piece.
That would depend less on whether her glass is half full or half empty and more on what it’s half-full of. Thanks, Jared.
–David
July 5, 2010 at 1:45 pm
chosenrebel
Love the idea or 299 word novels and love how you execute the concept. Bravo. I will return often and have already passed the link on to my son-in-law, who loves the short story form.
I find I can read them out loud and almost always capture the the spirit of their voice right the first time. Remarkable achievement on your part.
I appreciate that comment very much, rebel! The voice is crucial to most of these shorts. Thank you for sharing your experience (not to mention for wanting to read them aloud in the first place!).
–David