We boys had a club in the attic of Mitchell’s garage, the whole time I knew him and until he disappeared. We had handshakes and irrelevant passwords to guard against infiltration attempts that sadly never occurred. We thought we knew what a club for men should have, so we hired my sister to dance for us nude for a quarter, at a time when a dime was good for a full-size Milky Way bar. We swapped comic books and practiced sword moves and we listened to scratchy 45s of long-haired bands from England and thought of ourselves as mods. We sang along or argued about baseball or girls we knew from other schools who might do it. It was summer, and she’d been alternating bathing suits of several styles, so her tan lines were smudged and blurry, but one sharp line high on the thigh showed she’d been flashing a bit of cheek at the boys at the pool. Mitchell as host and de facto leader, if we had one, set the hours of operation and the occasional agenda, and decided what girls could entertain, which meant he ran auditions. I had brought some Lucky Strikes I had swiped from a careless adult at a picnic and was practicing smoke rings when Mitchell gave me a conspiratorial look and nodded in the direction of my sister, who was stepping out of her shorts. We hadn’t been caught, but I felt caught. I wanted to wrap her in a blanket and take her home before she realized what she’d been doing. Mitchell grinned at me and winked and I thought I might hit him, but it wasn’t he who had failed to protect her. The needle came down on the record and Mitchell got up to dance with the dancer.
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July 9, 2010 at 9:33 pm
chosenrebel
A tragic story of a brother not being a brother to a sister too young to know the lecherous hearts of her brother’s friends. Here’s to 299 words helping other brothers be better protectors.
You’re an artist.
Thank you, chosenrebel, and welcome back to Very Short Novels. I’m delighted to see you don’t shrink from the risky material.
–David
July 11, 2010 at 12:41 pm
petesmama
Growing up is a difficult business. At some stage, being accepted by the cool kids is so much more important than coming from the same womb with some other person you barely know or understand. But then, do we ever really stop trying to fit in with the cool kids?
Then at other stages, we have sudden awareness of the significance of our actions. How we react determines who we are (or who we are determines how we react?). Thanks, petesmama. As far as I’m concerned, you’re one of the cool kids.
–David
July 12, 2010 at 3:16 pm
fightforthewrite
I like that I found your blog. Shorts are my thing. I like.
Thanks for your visit and comment, fftw! I don’t know how I missed it for so long.
–David
July 13, 2010 at 11:27 am
davehambo
Adolescent guilt, strong stuff!
It sure is, Dave: fast acting, long lasting! Thank you very much for leaving your comments.
–David
July 14, 2010 at 1:17 pm
The Querulous Squirrel
Poignant. Someday that sister is not going to forgive her brother and she’ll be telling her therapist about it and weeping with humiliation.
Yeah. So will he. Thanks Querulous.
–David
August 4, 2010 at 11:15 pm
thomaschalfant
So Mitchell disappeared – I’m thinking the narrator killed him sometime after he “danced” with his sister?
That would be pretty dramatic! Thanks, Tom
–David
August 30, 2010 at 11:05 am
grantman
……and then we all grew up… Very nice story about the stages of life … I guess we all start out as innocent… would have been nice had you started the piece with him sitting alone reflecting swamp bound in a pouring rain somewhere in Southeast Asia… A place where this generation truly came understand the loss of our innocence..
Grantman
December 7, 2010 at 11:31 pm
Anthony Timpanelli
“until he disappeared”…sneaky…it totally left my mind as the disturbing scene came into focus.
Sneaky it is, but fair, I hope.
–David