I’m sitting at a red light falling in love. She’s cute and small and dark and young. She would have to be young for this brand of romance. I can’t see much of her past the headrest; what’s more, the glare off my windshield and the tint of her back window filters somewhat her evident charm, but when she turns her head just so, as if looking at the other driver’s knee, I can see just enough. And smart! A brilliant browline crowns a clear and deepset eye of sparkling darkness. Love at a distance is young love, yes, not to say immature love, enamorament of youthfulness, maybe, love of the young as young. I’ve fallen hard for women of more commensurate age, but from nearer, with fewer panes intermediate, close enough for our breaths to mingle, near enough for tongues to snap like wit. That doesn’t make it better. She doesn’t know I’m watching her, but I will catch her eye when I pass alongside, if this maddening traffic permits. And there will be still more to do to make her mine, besides eliminating the other driver. He barely appreciates her, but even if he does willingly relinquish her to me, she may still not readily abandon the familiarity of his spongy front seat for my firmly upholstered one. She has so much to learn. Green light. As our cars pull even, a turn of her head complicates our courtship. I can’t fully possess her without at least a profile and some acknowledgment from her that I am not alone in love. Stunningly, the other driver, by her face, is a woman, and a brilliant, compassionate woman at that; her passenger, when she finally turns toward me, the most magnificent springer spaniel, purebred of champions, aged approximately three.
Copyright © February 10, 2000 David Hodges
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February 10, 2007 at 12:08 am
David Schleicher
I’ve personally done this many times…I think you captured the moment and the inner monologue very well.
So you know. What guy doesn’t? Thanks for stepping up.
–David
February 10, 2007 at 12:54 am
kingcobraphx
Beautiful, oh how I know the feeling! Great site. Great works.
Another one to watch out for! Excellent.
–David
February 10, 2007 at 2:35 am
archiearchive
Yes! I fell in love with a samoyed like that 🙂
Now we are officially a support group.
–David
February 10, 2007 at 1:44 pm
Lori
I couldn’t comment on the previous trilogy. Still digesting the differing p.o.v. and meanings of those.
This one has a lovely light touch — I’m thrilled that you’ve got that versatility, otherwise, I’d have to stay away for a bit, until I’d…uh…recovered.
Now I’m ready for anything!
I imagine you’re not alone in needing time to work through the troubling trilogy, Lori. But thank you for daring to return. I posted this one quite deliberately, to lighten the mood as you suggest. Glad you’re back.
–David
February 10, 2007 at 7:30 pm
ombudsben
Captures the moment well; nice turn at the end. My Edie girl (black lab mix) says woof, woof!
Tell her woof arf grrr for me.
–David
February 11, 2007 at 3:01 am
mandarine
Very tricky love first sight when one forgotten one’s glasses has, is.
Love in mind’s eye just as tricky.
–David
February 11, 2007 at 11:37 am
litlove
I do like you in flirtatious, seductive mood. Quite a long time ago Baudelaire wrote a very famous poem about falling in love with a woman glimpsed on the street, and this is the 21st century prose poem update. You make me want to be the woman in that car.
And as I imagine you, you are.
–David
February 11, 2007 at 12:17 pm
red dirt girl
I’m laughing……..your twists………..how I do so love them……..I needed that smile, David. Yes, many a car infatuation have I had…….me in cool sunglasses, tapping my fingers to music, bestowing secret smiles when I choose and lusting for big brown eyes, fur as soft as silk……….
Nicely done, red dirt girl!
–David
February 13, 2007 at 9:23 am
Lakshmi
David David.. The eternal romantic.. Sigh Sigh.. Quelle Romance.. You paint with words… I am grinning like a cheshire cat.
Are you by chance driving nearby? I could pull alongside.
–David
February 26, 2007 at 6:38 pm
briseis
Amazing; absolutely amazing.
Of course, I’ve been the object of the more metropolitan version– “bus love”– and it can be a little freaky at times.
I’m sure you have, Briseis. And I’m sure it was. And I apologize on behalf of all men.
–David
February 27, 2007 at 7:17 pm
James Steerforth
Nope! Cute idea, but sorry, this lacks plausibility.
When you see this much –
“but when she turns her head just so, as if looking at the other driver’s knee, I can see just enough. And smart! A brilliant browline crowns a clear and deepset eye of sparkling darkness”
– then you’ve seen too much that could not possibly be cute human female.
Thanks for the careful reading, James. Personally, I’ve been bamboozled by a headrest.
–David
February 28, 2007 at 2:34 am
James Steerforth
I love the density and conciseness of your 299-word stories.
February 28, 2007 at 2:35 am
James Steerforth
Pardon me – not stories, novels!
Well, thank you again!
–David
February 28, 2007 at 10:46 am
Annelisa
Fun!
Both my sister and her sister in law have/ had springer spaniels – cute dogs!
Thanks, Annelisa. So you understand the appeal.
–David
July 19, 2007 at 1:46 pm
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