Tonight we’ll murder someone in Room 14. It’s a little game we play to keep ourselves amused on slow weekends. There have been too many slow weekends and our bed-and-breakfast needs a boost we can’t get from pumpkin festivals and cut flowers. Unsolved murders work best. In addition to keeping us out of jail, an unsolved murder will lend more mystery to the inn than a fully adjudicated affair, unless . . . unless the convicted killer was hung and swore before they hooded her to wreak her vengeance on Room 14. Your thrill-seeking guest needs a ghastly image or a poignant doomed love story or both. If you can hint that the victim might return at night to beg the help of your overnight guest to avenge the slicing of her vocal cords and her brutal slow slaying with a corkscrew, a double with private bath can go for 4, 5 hundred a night. That might be enough to get us to the holidays. My sister isn’t sure she can go through with the corkscrew. That part we’re still working on. Research doesn’t say so, but they’re squirrelly couples mostly, who’ve driven some distance. They don’t tell anyone where they’re going, so they’re hard to track. Whatever horrors they’re leaving behind, they’re drawn by the unfamiliar smell of something delicious beyond the grave that’s just beginning to rot. You’re not going to get this couple any other way. My sister says we need more time to plan, but I say the girl in Room 14 is traveling alone. She paid with cash and gave us a fake ID. It’s the middle of July and business won’t pick up until October. I tell my sister the tale of the murdered innkeeper is also popular. She doesn’t think that’s funny.
Copyright © June 28, 2007 David Hodges
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June 28, 2007 at 10:33 pm
Cliff Burns
Like this notion of “flash” or micro fiction, condensed narratives packing a lot of power. I like to do short-shorts when I’m warming up, kind of a writing exercise.
Just turn my muse loose, give her a page to fill and see what happens. Some amazing collisions of words and creative juxtapositions result. There’s something to this and I hope you’ll keep it up.
Thanks, Cliff. No sign of slowing down yet!
–David
June 29, 2007 at 3:06 am
wizzer
That’s a dark one David. I love the “unsolved murder” being partly solved by the fact they “hooded her” As always, the intrigue is whether this is for real or just an imaginary game? – I almost forgot it’s a novel!
Thanks wizzer. The part about the money value of haunted rooms is true.
–David
June 29, 2007 at 8:43 am
whypaisley
that was excellent.. i loved it.. i think it is so amazing what you can do with so few words…..
Thank you, whypaisley! Why does this not link back to your own remarkable blog?
–David
June 29, 2007 at 11:38 pm
anonymom
Like this one a lot, that first sentence packs a punch and draws you in.
Thanks, anonymom! Glad you stuck through to the end.
–David
July 1, 2007 at 4:06 am
nursemyra
as promised, as soon as I was back in blogworld I tuned in to read a couple of your novels. as good as anticipated and worlds better than the in-flight movies inflicted on me earlier today
Thanks nursemyra, and welcome back. See you at the hospital!
–David
July 1, 2007 at 9:02 am
Bill Blunt
Very cool, David! I enjoyed this a lot.
Thanks, Bill, though between you and Harry and Thomas Hamburger, Jnr, I hardly know which of you writes these comments!
–David
July 1, 2007 at 7:38 pm
bellevelma
Thanks to you, and my brother who sent me old Nancy Drew books for my birthday, I just had to turn on some extra lights around this place. Creepy. I liked the ending the best.
Thanks, bellevelma. It’s all just a plot to burn electricity.
–David
July 2, 2007 at 8:32 pm
whypaisley
i don’t know why i am not linking… ill see if i post this maybe it will…
It didn’t, but I was able to plug in the url myself. If you’d rather link back to the Ink Pot, or Searching for Somewhere Warm, just let me know.
–David
July 3, 2007 at 12:27 pm
JaneDoughnut
And THIS should be the surprise ending to 1408. Commence suing John Cusack.
I took a lot less of your time, too, didn’t I, Jane? Thank you, as always for your visit and entertaining comments.
–David
July 12, 2007 at 9:30 am
Trik
Excellent twisted read. Left me wanting more of the story though. Heh, I guess that’s the point. Keep up the good work.
Well, thank you, Trik! It was twisty, wasn’t it? I know they’re short, but, as you suggest, better to finish reading and want more than quit reading halfway through! Welcome to Very Short Novels where every story is always exactly the same length.
–David
July 13, 2007 at 12:10 am
briseis
Excellent, of course.
Appreciated, naturally.
–David
July 24, 2007 at 6:26 am
Anonymous
wow..!!!! its chillingly gooooddddd..sent shivers down my spine
Thanks! Did you mean to be Anonymous? You could check in as Mr. and Mrs. Smith.
–David
July 28, 2007 at 2:15 pm
joe
brilliant
draws you in right from the start
well done David
and sorry to ask how do you put on your own stories
Thank you, joe! I know you’ve figured out by now, you can’t post your own stories here. But I’m glad you’re enjoying mine. Welcome to Very Short Novels!
–David