They could be sisters, Rachel and Ayat, 18 and 17, dark and doomed. Now departed they are photographs, not girls; they are headshots looking forward, side by side on newsstands and on TV screens, never meeting. They never met. Where Ayat felt safe, Rachel would never have ventured, even if she could have scored a visa, but both girls died where Rachel felt safe, in a grocery store to which Ayat brought death in a bookbag on a Tuesday afternoon. The grocery clerk who also died in the blast is not a photograph; he is a grocery clerk. That is his story. The story of the girls is one that no one wants to hear but no one can forget. Much is made of their having lived four mere miles apart and of their mothers’ yearnings to cross that distance and others in the years since their girls’ deaths. They will no more bridge those gaps than swap husbands or faiths or nationalities. Nothing in the evidence from the scene suggests that the girls spoke, nor certainly that Rachel helped Ayat out of her pack, shouldered it briefly herself and remarked about its weight while the other girl found her phone and placed a call. They might have spared one another if that had happened, but their mothers can’t know that it did or whether Ayat had a moment of doubt and placed the call to steel her will or whether Rachel asked for an explanation when Ayat opened her hand to show her the detonator button. We know from the shrapnel the clerk was facing the blast. We know the girls’ names and the names of the grievance they stand for. Their mothers still have never met. Four miles they could manage, except for the last few inches.
Copyright © November 08, 2007 David Hodges
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November 8, 2007 at 5:58 pm
briseis
Depressing, David. But beautiful.
Thank you, Briseis.
–David
November 10, 2007 at 6:19 am
Manictastic
This is unfortunately very close to reality. Let’s hope one day we all can live in peace.
You might have to write that one, Manic. Thanks.
–David
November 10, 2007 at 7:44 am
litlove
This makes me think of something I wrote a few days ago about the role authors play in transforming the terrible things we do to one another into something sufficiently aesthetic to be bearable, into something, in other words, that we can actually look in the face. The quality of your writing makes it possible for your readers to contemplate these horrific events, David, and that’s a service to your society, because we do need to look them in the face. Thank you.
Does this mean I can still write about sex and dead babies? or must I always be responsible? Thank you Litlove, for the overwhelming compliment.
–David
November 13, 2007 at 9:23 am
Wizzer
I hate these cowardly acts with a passion but your writing has enabled me to at least see that there are (possibly) mothers of these people with some decency.
Thank you, Wizzer.
–David
November 20, 2007 at 9:24 am
modoathii
(i stand and clap) and i have inspiration for my next post. thanks dude.
we always look at these ‘cowards’ so to speak, as sadists with no face or life, but you’ve given them a soft side…a shocking one though.
quite the amazing tale-smith…
You are welcome, modoathii. And thank you right back.
–David
November 20, 2007 at 2:37 pm
Jamaican Dawta
Hi, I came across your site from a friend’s. Very unique concept – a 299-word novel.
You have a wonderful way with words, and I’ve already linked to you 🙂
This piece was so tragically beautiful. I felt everything.
I will be back.
How very kind of you. Thank you, Jamaican Dawta (and thank you to your friend) and welcome to Very Short Novels. There’s just a brief mention of Jamaica in “Circle the World” that might interest you.
–David